I was elated about my dance performance that day.
“If you’re nervous, just remember the poem,” my dance instructor said, gesturing to a poem framed on the wall.
Once everything turns from dark to bright,
It’s because you’ve found what turns on your light.
Those two lines are really all I bothered to remember, but later that day, before I went out on stage, I wished I remembered the other lines.
When I started to dance, I remembered the rest.
At least once in your life,
Let go of sadness and strife.
When you’ve given all you have to give,
You truly live. 
I need to take some words out. Please tell me which words I can take out.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the powerful words that you used. I think you could work on cleaning up the first part a little bit more
ReplyDeleteI need to take some words out. Please tell me which words I can take out.
ReplyDeleteI like how you used a quote in your story. I think you forgot to put your title.
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