Wednesday 24 February 2016

100 WC Week 8


"You gotta have a public image, look like you're doing good for the world," My manager said, "Help a child achieve their dreams of becoming a dancer, start a swimming club."

I nodded.

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When I got up on stage, I saw all the people watching me, and I realized that I had the chance to change the world.

"This started off as a way to improve my public image, but now I realize I have a chance to help. You can go green, get an electric car instead of a gas one, but, most likely, what you really care about is what makes the most change. You choose. As for me, I think I'll start with renting my summer house out at low prices so that the less fortunate can have the luxury for once."
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7 comments:

  1. Cocopuff24 February 2016 at 11:51

    I have too many words. Please let me know what to take out

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  2. jjmonkey24 February 2016 at 21:31

    I like your powerful words but your sentences are a bit jumbled but very good use of your words.

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  3. Unknown25 February 2016 at 20:39

    very good but i thouhgt it was kinda confuseing

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  4. Unknown25 February 2016 at 20:39

    very good but i thouhgt it was kinda confuseing

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  5. Negative Zero25 February 2016 at 22:39

    You should use a new line after a person speaks. I think you could remove the line "I saw all the people watching me" and great job on your story this week.

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  6. Unknown27 February 2016 at 12:32

    I like how you tied in a message into your story this week. Again, well done revising and editing your story it really shows in the quality work you produce.

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  7. Unknown27 February 2016 at 12:33

    I like how you tied in a message into your story this week. Again, well done revising and editing your story it really shows in the quality work you produce.

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