Tuesday 3 May 2016

100 WC Week 16


      Sunlight streamed through the trees, casting leaf-shaped shadows on the forest floor.
All I could hear was the sound of Jade's even hoof beats, hitting the ground as she cantered. We swept around a bend, and a creek came into view. The pebbles glistened at the bottom of the creek bed.

      I let Jade gain some speed to jump the creek, but I guess she didn't want to. She halted, but I flew through the air. Suddenly, I hit the ice-cold water. Jade nickered and sped off.

    "Jade! Wait!" I was left alone, soaking wet, and without a ride.
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3 comments:

  1. jjmonkey5 May 2016 at 10:08

    First of all its week 16 second of all i really like your story but its a bit confusing for someone who doesn't ride horses so maybe make it simpler.

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  2. Donut The Duck5 May 2016 at 10:09

    Your story is really good. You need to add an indent at the beggining of each paragraph

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  3. Negative Zero6 May 2016 at 17:54

    I like the strong words you used in your story. You really paid attention to your punctuation's and spelling. I didn't really understand some of the parts so I think you should make your words more simple next time. Great job in your story !

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